I can tell you have knowledge of music.
The problem with many of todays music producing software is that it limits the user to a certain sound. Usually this sounds extremely cheesy, but it was a good song. The cheese factor is definitely high and There was an absence of bass that also brought down the songs feel. But i like this song because it refuses to be simple and i can tell you something about music because a lot of the music on NG sounds like half the people don't know what in the hell they're doing.
Oh and just one question: Do you use drum samples?
I've never heard of logicexpress and i'll check it out.
Keep improving.
Bobbert.